I’m not against the clarification, and arguably the field can be improved upon, but in this case the Extra field quintupled from about 12 words to over 60. That’s a lot of extra text.
Limited real estate = parsimony is of the essence.
We want to think somewhere between the phrasing you’d see in a textbook (long, exhaustive, accurate and encompassing but at the expense of space) and the phrasing you’d see in a telegram (arguably probably too terse, limited, vulnerable to lack of clarity). Somewhere in the middle; punchy, precise. Think more like snipers, less like napalm; a single trumpet, not an orchestra. Clarion call.
Also probably one of those cases where an image is worth a thousand words as well, though this may be a challenging one to find a great image for, potentially.
What about something as simple as:
Distal stimulus: Telephone
Proximal Stimuli:
- Sound waves from telephone
- Photons(light) from telephone
Accomplishes the same thing pretty much and way fewer words.
This is precisely in the right spirit. Tight, clean, gets the basics across, no wasted space.
Also, for clarity: I don’t mean to say we can never expound with detail, or that it’s always a bad thing, necessarily. Just that, all things being equal, it’s rarely desirable for the bite-sized, atomized, arena of a flashcard and that real estate is both mighty valuable and very vulnerable to information creep/bloat.
That makes sense especially since this definitely doesn’t need the original amount of detail I included to get the same point across. I’ll make the change to this one and the other card I made with this content.